Original:

“Discourses are ways of being in the world; they are forms of life which integrate words, acts, values, beliefs, attitudes, and social identities as well as gestures, glances, body positions, and clothes.” (Gee 6)

With Embedded Quote:

Gee defines Discourse  as “ways of being in the world; they are forms of life which integrate words, acts, values, beliefs, attitudes, and social identities as well as gestures, glances, body positions, and clothes.” (6)

Making this an embedded quote connects my words with Gee’s a bit more in the beginning of the essay.

Original:

Gee defines Discourse  as “ways of being in the world; they are forms of life which integrate words, acts, values, beliefs, attitudes, and social identities as well as gestures, glances, body positions, and clothes.” (6)

With Ellipses:

Gee defines Discourse  as “ways of being in the world . . . forms of life which integrate words, acts, values, beliefs, attitudes, and social identities as well as gestures, glances, body positions, and clothes.” (6)

Adding the ellipses makes the sentences flow  much better. It makes it feel as though there are no unnecessary stops in the quote so it sounds like one uniform definition.

Original:

“She fails to characterize her own expertise in the overly optimistic form called for by such interviews,” said Gee (6).

With Brackets:

“[The interviewee] fails to characterize her own expertise in the overly optimistic form called for by such interviews,” said Gee (6).

Without the brackets, the reader would not know who Gee was trying to talk about. “She” could be anybody. But having “the interviewee” within the brackets, the reader now knows who is being addressed in the quote.

Original:

With Block Quote:

Adding the block quote is necessary seeing as the quote is four lines long.

Original:

“When we think of nonverbals, we think of how we judge others, how they judge us and what the outcomes are . . . the other audience that’s influenced by our nonverbals, and that’s ourselves.” ( Cuddy 3:20)

Signaling With Author:

Cuddy says, “When we think of nonverbals, we think of how we judge others, how they judge us and what the outcomes are . . . the other audience that’s influenced by our nonverbals, and that’s ourselves.” (3:20)

Adding how Cuddy was the one who had said this quote makes it much easier for the reader to understand whom is talking. Otherwise, the reader would probably be confused.

Original:

Gee says, “I have said the right thing, but my ‘saying-doing’ combination is nonetheless all wrong.” (5)

Signaling Without Author:

“I have said the right thing, but my ‘saying-doing’ combination is nonetheless all wrong.” (Gee 5)

Signaling with the author in this situation helps to integrate the quote better than to just randomly include it into my essay.

Original:

The evidence shows that if you are not able to “blend into” a certain social situation, then you will surely stick out like a sore thumb. This value can be expressed in any sort of social situation as well. For example, if you are in an interview, you must express the right language in order for you to get the job. Gee touches upon this on page six of these papers.

Summarizing:

[Gee] talks about how in one set of simulated job interviews, a woman was hired because she was able to speak more formally than the previous woman. Though this rings true, this woman did not show the interviewers how strong of a leader she was. Instead, the whole time she was talking about how she will ask for help in a certain situation, instead of taking initiative . . . Though she had the “language” aspect of the interview down, she was not able to show the values of a person who would receive that job.

Summarizing this part of Gee’s journal helps to give the reader a better idea of what he was trying to convey.

Original:

“Thus, what is important is not language, and surely not grammar, but saying (writing)- doing- being- valuing- believing combinations.These combinations I call ‘Discourses,’ with a capital ‘D’ [‘discourse’ with a little ‘d’, to me, means connected stretches of language that make sense, so ‘discourse’ is part of ‘Discourse’].” (Gee 6)

Paraphrasing:

A Discourse is different from a discourse in the sense that instead of using just language and grammar, actions and values are used.

Paraphrasing could help the flow of the essay. Having to read that long quote could be confusing and take away from the point of the essay.

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