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Class Notes 4/23

Class Notes 4/23

Suggestions From Dani, Peer Review Comments, & Plans to Edit: Organize paragraphs so that they are grouped more together by the topic I had my second paragraph about natural systems and then another paragraph about it later in the paper; I could put these two paragraphs not necessarily “together” but at least group them so I am not repeating myself later in the paper Introduce all of my sources in the introduction so the reader has an idea of what…

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Notes on Polyface Farms

Notes on Polyface Farms

Do we really need chemicals, pesticides, and pharmaceuticals? Many industrial farmers use these things every day in their farming, but is there really a need for them? Polyface Farms could say otherwise. In  “The Animals: Practicing Complexity” Pollan writes about how on Polyface Farms, they do not need to use these chemicals and “additives”. It is argued that the reasoning for this is, contrary to industrial farming, when you use a biological process for raising animals the way that nature…

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Revision Plan 1

Revision Plan 1

On my draft, it has been said that I need to do some rearranging of paragraphs to help my paper flow better. Along with this, I also need to make the transition between each paragraph smoother. In my conclusion, I ended with a question. It was suggested that instead of this, I should end with a statement or at least an answer to that question. It was also suggested that I can introduce Alexander into my introduction. I could give a sentence or…

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Drafting 3

Drafting 3

People always talk about literacy acquisition, but what makes it so that the person is able to even achieve acquisition in the first place? Learning about someone’s background, or primary Discourse, not only gives one an insight into who the person is but also why they are who they are (Gee 8). Primary Discourses can give a view on how a student is able to acquire literacy in many ways later in life. Depending on your background or upbringing, it…

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Drafting 2

Drafting 2

In these paragraphs, I tried to mainly focus on connecting the different authors together instead of just connecting the authors to the literacy narratives. Sponsors are not always needed in order to be able to acquire literacy (or at least to appear as though you have). According to Alexander, the success story cultural narrative could be so popular because the success story is “what teachers want to see” (624). If this is true, then are there certain key points that…

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Writing Workshop 1

Writing Workshop 1

Gender and race may make literacy acquisition much harder for those who are in the minority. Victim and outsider narratives could take this into account. Alexander writes “Outsider narratives portray a literate self who does not fit in and looks in on the literate activities in which others seem to participate as part of the norm…[the victim, rebel, and outsider] narratives demonstrate that anguish, loss, and hopelessness are also parts of the journey toward literacy” (627). This is true with…

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Drafting 1

Drafting 1

Deborah Brandt brings up the idea of sponsors in her literature Sponsors of Literacy. She writes about how sponsors are one of the main reasons why people are able to acquire literacy. Brandt describes a sponsor as “any agents, local or distant, concrete or abstract, who enable, support, teach, model, as well as recruit, regulate, suppress, or withhold literacy—and gain advantage by it in some way” (556). Though Brandt says that it is “any” agent which is “local”, just how…

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